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eviewed Paper: ntp1886933 – Mon Apr 29 14:42:27 EDT 2024 page 1 / 5 Paper Title: The Extraordinary Benefits of Breastfeeding Length: 4 Pages Paper Style: MLA Paper Type: Other (please describe in your p Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No Feedback Areas: Topic Development, Focus/Thesis Statement Paper Goals: Please review paper for feedback. Review Summary: Hello Kimberly Thank you for submitting your research essay to NetTutor. My name is Kim, and I enjoyed reading for you. Strengths: You’ve begun to gather a lot of potentially useful information here, including material from outside sources to support your argument that breastfeeding benefits both the mother and child. Suggestions: I would like to comment on focus/thesis and your structure. Consider revising and clarifying your thesis sentence as it should directly state to your readers what you plan to develop/prove in the body section of your paper. In other words, your thesis should outline all of your subtopics, acting as a “road map,” that shows your readers exactly where you are taking them in your writing. Regarding developing ideas and essay structure, consider incorporating transition words to aid with the flow of your paper. Transition words (and phrases) are essential in papers as they guide your readers through your thought process and keep your ideas cohesive. It is essential that your readers are able to follow how your information is directly related to your thesis/main idea. And each paragraph should cover one of the subtopics, meaning every sentence in a paragraph needs to support the topic named in the topic sentence. If you include quotes, remember to always follow with an explanation, in your own words, on how it relates to the topic. The first instances of repeated issues are pointed out, and suggestions for corrections to be made are given where possible. Please use your writing resources as well as the given suggestions for corrections to help make revisions and improve your writing. Keep up the good work, and thanks for using NetTutor! Reviewed Paper: ntp1886933 – Mon Apr 29 14:42:27 EDT 2024 page 2 / 5 Introduction provides background on the topic. A good thesis will state the purpose of the paper as well as the specific main ideas that you will address in the body of the paper. It is also important to make sure that these main ideas appear in the same order that you talk about them in the body. This will help preserve the overall organization of the paper. If this is the first topic, this will be the first topic mentioned in your thesis Also, you do not need ( ) around Tucker et al.; otherwise, the sentence reads Studies by reveal. The ( ) are used at the end of the sentence Reviewed Paper: ntp1886933 – Mon Apr 29 14:42:27 EDT 2024 page 3 / 5 Remember sources are used to back your claims. You can develop your body paragraphs by following the PIE method (Point, Integrate research, Explanation). Try to begin your body paragraphs in your own words with a topic sentence that establishes the Point and focus of the discussion. Remember that each of your body paragraphs should relate to and support your thesis statement. You will want to integrate research information in the discussion to support the paragraph’s point. Be sure to clearly explain the point of the paragraph and connect the point with the thesis statement. This will be your next point, topic in your thesis Reviewed Paper: ntp1886933 – Mon Apr 29 14:42:27 EDT 2024 page 4 / 5 The topic sentence should identify the main idea and point of the paragraph and include a transition word. To choose an appropriate topic sentence, read the paragraph and think about its main idea and point. The supporting details in the paragraph (the sentences other than the topic sentence) will develop or explain the topic sentence. It needs to re-hook to a point in your thesis. Reviewed Paper: ntp1886933 – Mon Apr 29 14:42:27 EDT 2024 page 5 / 5 Conclusion summarizes main ideas, bringing closure to your paper New page Powered by TCPDF (